Below you can read a sample student comment and then a reply to a student's comment.
The intent of the student reply is to further discussion about the students' comments. Your reply should begin with the student's name and your response to his or her comment. According to the rubric, your reply should be substantive and insightful. What follows is a sample acceptable reply to a student comment from a reading and discussion of the memoir Don't Let's Go to the Dogs Tonight. The student reply identifies the name of the original student who commented on a posted question, encourages readers to reflect on the relationship between two sisters and offers concrete quoted or paraphrased references to the comment points she chooses to address. Students' replies may respond to this reflection or to the original writer's points:
Student comment to post question:
I can understand the relationship between Vanessa and Bobo
because I have a sister as well. We act the same way towards each other just
like Vanessa and Bobo. In the book, the two sisters seem to fight constantly
and to try to get their own way. Vanessa always seemed to pick on Bobo by
telling her that she was annoying, or embarrassing. Still, when one of the two
sisters was sick or hurt, the other was there to take care of them or protect
the one in need. On page 177, Bobo drinks Turgwe river water before boiling it
and gets diarrhea from the water. Vanessa cleaned Bobo up, gave her water, and
fed Bobo the last fresh orange from the food supply, which is what made Bobo
recover. Vanessa may not say that she loves Bobo, but she'll do anything in her
power to keep Bobo alive and safe from a threat. Vanessa always seems to be
away from her parents, or just ignores them. Bobo says that Vanessa always
"goes into herself" when she's around her parents or just doesn't
want to listen to anybody. Bobo, on the other hand, wants to impress her
parents. She tries to be around them and shows them what she can do. The
sisters, in some ways are very different from each other, but they still care
for one another.
Posted Jun 30, 2009 2:25 pm
Student response to comment:
Lauren, I agree that they care for each other and look out for
each other. However, I disagree that they act the same way to each other. On
page 171 dad, Vanessa, Bobo and some men are going to go out into the ranch to
mend fences and catch cattle. They are on the journey when they all get out of
the Land Rover to pee. Vanessa said, “Keep boogies for me. Make sure they
aren’t spying. So I keep boogies. And when she has finished I say, Keep boogies
for me, and she nonchalantly climbs back into the Land Rover.” Bobo looked out
for Vanessa but Vanessa did not look out for Bobo. I did like how when Bobo was
very sick Vanessa took such good care of Bobo. Bobo and Vanessa’s personalities
are very different too. Bobo is more of a “tomboy.” She is very good at
shooting the gun and is more than willing to learn how to take it apart and put
it back together again. She also helps her parents with rounding up cattle and
helping around their farm. Vanessa is a little more girly and likes baking and
knows how to shoot a gun very well but does not like to show it. She helps out
her parents too but I feel that Bobo helps them with more physical labor. They
act like sisters sometimes. They fight but they look out for each other and
care for each other.
Posted Jul 16, 2009 7:06 pm
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